I tried a fiction; it
was in reverse order hope it will give a different feel to the readers.
It was based on Write Tribe Wednesday picture Prompt.
Now
It was based on Write Tribe Wednesday picture Prompt.
Now
I can’t believe my eyes. It was full of gold coins; it will
take even a day to count it. I feel like I was living a dream. The coin has some king’s face on one end and some valley on the other.
It may be centuries old. I hear stories about treasure chest but
never thought it would happen in real life. In today’s case, it happens to me. A
wet droplet dwells into the coin from my eyes; I was so happy yet my eyes
drenched with tears. It was a beautiful feeling. Minutes later, a few more
drops join the show; this time it was a rain. I stretch my hands and welcome
the nature falls. I look up and shout in high tone. “Thanks God”
5min ago
We shift to this new house last week. I look around the
perfect place in my home back yard for tree sapling. It is a hot day; sun rays finding
way beneath the branches of tall trees falls on the green curbs. I notice a
paper floating through the air; it falls on the empty space. I took the paper;
it states “Here is the place buddyJ”.
I
realize it would be the perfect place for the tree. It is far from other trees
and the soil here will be ideal for trees. I am a gardener; I have planted more
trees in my profession. I took my shovel; dig a hole twice the height of stem. Suddenly,
my shovel hits something; it happens to me many times in the forest. I have
found a lot of polythene bags, dead animals even some skulls. Today it is clear
that it is none of the above. I dig further; it seems like a wooden box or something.
It is a wooden chest box with a lock. Now, I became suspicious and make sure
that no one was there. I carry it from the ground and rub the dust. I took my hammer and slam the lock in it. “Bang”
it opens, I have no idea of what is inside.
30 min ago
My wife and I have often arguments. Today, it is because of
the plant curb I have bought instead of lending her the balance money. She asks
me to buy some house hold things; I went to grocery store and bought the things
she asks to. On my way, I look at a sycamore plant curb at the plant store. From
the look of it, I know it will die soon. I told the shopkeeper to plant it. He yelled
at me “Why do you care?” I care about herbs, which was the only one thing I
know. Hence, I buy the plant with the remaining money. My wife doesn’t like me
spending more money on plants. She takes me a lecture about the pending debts. I
kind of have the feeling; we need to look after the trees just like other
humans.
Feedback will make
anyone learn and grow better. Kindly share your thoughts.
I liked this post...it feels like in movies... the reverse action is good too..
ReplyDeleteThanks, I am glad u visualize the scenes. :)
DeleteWish it becomes a reality! :)
ReplyDeleteA novel way of telling a story... good one!
Thanks Shilpa, It was my first attempt with less dialogues, glad u like it.
DeleteVery nice post and the reverse is infact good :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Siva. It was my first reverse attempt.
DeleteThanx laxmi
ReplyDeletewow.. u are becoming a professional writer :).. trying new methods :)
ReplyDeleteThanks deeps, u r always an inspiration.
DeleteI think it is cool how you described the events in reverse order. Different but cool. It shows how different life was only 5 minutes before and 30 minutes and how life can change instantly. ♥
ReplyDeleteThanks Kathy, life s unpredictable.
DeleteInteresting Nachi how you did the story backwards. But it fits together very nicely.
ReplyDeleteDropping by from the prompt. Love how the Universe points the way. Very nice.
I believe good things will happen to good people. I tried that in fiction.
Deletenice work......u r gowing......nd m happy to c that....this one being different and moral one...........liked it........keep it up :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Akanksha, your words r encouraging.
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